Announcements19 Feb 2008 12:14 am
I can’t sugar-coat it. This song is definitely a victim of the tight timeline. It’s a classic example of a song that just wasn’t working, not matter what I tried to do lyrically, melodically, chordally, arrangement-wise. It was so tempting to pursue the idea, because I felt there was SOMETHING there, but I just needed the time to rewrite it a couple of times to find the little nugget I was searching for. But lo, Monday rolls around and the clock looms large!
Anyway, let the group speak. Lay it on me!
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I don’t know about this one. It’s too easy to stop listening to what you are saying. Does that make sense? I guess what I’m saying is that you really have to LISTEN to hear the words cause the music doesn’t carry the lyrics easily. That’s my two cents.
I asked Claudie to sit and listen to this one with me. As a test, before I started the song I asked her to describe the first word or two that came to her mind while the song played. I would do the same.
Not long into the song she said she felt her word was “soundtrack” as in something she would like to be floating in the back of a romance movie. She wouldn’t really be focusing on the song but she would be soothed by your voice and melody.
My insta-flash words on the other hand were “fast forward”. I had the urge to push the skip button on a CD player to see what the next song sounds like. (ouch! sorry about that - but that’s the feeling that came over me).
You have such a great voice and you’re obviously extremely gifted musically on a multitude of instruments (and I’m not even counting the production side of the business).
I guess I’m just waiting for your signature sound. I’ll know it when I hear it. I’m sure you’re it will show itself if yo keep this aggressive writing flowing. You’ll probably hit a brick wall and just when you’re most frustrated, Wham! - there it will be.
Cheers, Randy
I was reading the lyrics as I listened, but if I hadn’t been, I’m not sure the words would have registered; it might have been just good background noise.
I liked the chorus but otherwise it’s not your strongest. But you knew that already!
Lots more homework on this one and it’s “a beauty.” Love is a wild ride
heightened by wistfulness and uncertainty which you convey. Great vehicle for the smitten or the about-to-be.
(Anybody songwriter who can handle the word “reality” so well and get away with it a special cat.)
This has got HOOG PERTENSHUL. Thumb high, Yo.
Eliot
This song seems to me a song for the sake of making a song. It doesn’t move me, it misses some authenticity and for lack of a better word - heart. A pure deadline deal - I know the feeling. It sounds forced and rushed. It might be good for a soundtrack - the type with some cheesy CASIO keyboard parts - you know what I’m talkin’ ’bout? It left me feeling empty and wanting to get back to reality!
I listened to it with the boys and they both gave it a three. The chorus was my favorite part but I was so-so on the rest. The score was a 3.5 but I put it in as a 4 cause I’m a nice guy.
Cheers, Warren, Liam and Nicklaus
From my point of view, the chorus isn’t workin’.
I should add that I kinda liked the verses.
I agree with the Casio keyboard comment man. I couldn’t figure out what I didn’t like but I’m pretty sure change that up and you are on to something.
I think I just placed where and when this song’s inspiration came from. How about St. Elmo’s Fire Soundtrack, circa 1988?
That might be my deep-seeded lifetime crush on Andie McDowell rearing its head again…